Lonely (kind of graphic?)

[Mark D. Windmill]

Hey, I liked the image you painted in the reader's mind. My personal opinion and taste is that in poetry, often, less is more. Words can mix up the message or make the reader lose the focus on the message conveyed. I thought this was almost more of the start of a gritty bruce willis old cop movie. Not to make fun , you did a good job, point being is it flows as a story much more than a poem.

Good job