an attempt at haiku.

[jonatron5]

Warm earth, thawing cold

There she stood smiling at me

I take this step so bold

 

The earth is still new,

And so are we; I asked her

And she said, "I do."

 

Summer like a flame

Burning passion forever

Our desire not tamed

 

 

Locusts sing there song

all seeking what I have found

Children aren't wrong

 

the days grow colder

My children I raise ,While my

Love never smolders

 

leaves fall from the trees

so too my children now leave

making their own home

 

frozen ponds iced up

my life now forfeit, I see

my love smiles at me

[rowens]

Is it all one poem? The stanzas all seem to go together, but some of the lines don't seem to have much to do with the stanzas they're in. They're almost there, almost but not quite.

[Requiem]

Cute poem! Sums up an entire lifetime. Just a few things:
Stanza 3, line 3: "untamed" instead of "not tamed" would sound less clunky.
Stanza 4, line 3: Children aren't wrong... about what? Also, maybe stick to the stanza's locust theme for this line - throwing children in there was kind of a random topic change, and felt out of place...
Lastly, I noticed that stanzas 3, 4, and 6 completely lacked punctuation, while the others had at least a comma in there somewhere. Going off of that, the only period in the whole poem is in stanza 2 - I would either get rid of it, or add them to the rest of the poem where necessary.
Anyways, great job - Happy Writing!

[Mark D. Windmill]

I like the flow of your text, that being said Haikus are meant to be short and powerful, words only guiding to something greater. They are challenging as they are very simple and so somewhat complicated for our complex minds. Less is more.

Cool text though !