In Love with The Coffeeshop Girl

[Mwaba don]

In Love with The Coffeeshop Girl

Every morning I order a double americano
(So refined!)
and a fresh pastry,
(How continental!)
and write poems about The Coffeeshop Girl.
(He's probably writing a novel...)

The Coffeeshop Girl and I are in love but we're both too shy to admit it.
We tell each other in subtle ways.
I say things like "Good Morning," I smile. I leave a tip. (why did you put good morning in Inverted commas like you are quoting someone else.)
She says things like "the usual?" and "Have a nice day!". (the usual? what do you mean? the usual can be anything in a conversation. Being a little specific could help the reader get a grasp of what you are trying to say.)


I sit by the window behind a notebook and thick frames.
Another notebook with thick frames sits at the counter, more thick frames with laptops sit at tables.
They say things like "Good Morning," they smile. They leave a tip.
She says things like "the usual?" and "Have a nice day!".

We all order double americanos.
(So predictable!)
We all eat the fresh pastries.
(How cliché!)
We write all poems about The Coffeeshop Girl.
(He's probably just like the rest...)
We're all in love with The Coffeeshop Girl.

I like the title and the setting you base your poem on. coffee shops are a common place for writers. nice one.
I think the flow of the poem was not good because of the meter of your lines used. I think it was a little rough to read. Try using a good meter to make your lines smooth.
I know i am still a learner in poetry but whats with the brackets.
Your poem seems to take a leap to you and the girl both start ordering the double America-nos. Maybe a line on how you two get together could make he poem much interesting.
I think you should work on your punctuations in the lines. 
Thanks for poem.