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Plasticine
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06-08-2014, 10:05 AM
zmeansy: 'just flat enough to notice' is an important line to me. But it has presented some grammatical problems in the first stanza. As some of the other comments pointed out, the punctuation is unclear. I'm having trouble trying to punctuate it more clearly without puncturing the meaning. But it's a fine problem to have.
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Plasticine - by Tiger the Lion - 05-26-2014, 10:15 AM
RE: Plasticine - by QDeathstar - 05-26-2014, 10:46 AM
RE: Plasticine - by Tiger the Lion - 05-26-2014, 11:01 AM
RE: Plasticine - by Todd - 05-26-2014, 11:33 AM
RE: Plasticine - by Tiger the Lion - 05-26-2014, 11:46 AM
RE: Plasticine - by Tiger the Lion - 06-02-2014, 05:14 AM
RE: Plasticine - by ellajam - 06-04-2014, 06:08 AM
RE: Plasticine - by RSaba - 06-04-2014, 05:39 AM
RE: Plasticine - by zmeansy - 06-04-2014, 06:42 AM
RE: Plasticine - by Tiger the Lion - 06-08-2014, 10:05 AM
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