05-31-2014, 04:29 AM
"Looking for Feedback"
Turn amp all the way up, point pickups toward amp, strum. Viola, feedback.
Best try a music shop. This is a poetry site, and we give critiques as a reward for someone who has given critiques to others, usually a 3 to 1 ratio.
However,
Your rhymes are forced, your lines are trite,
the first four lines gave me a fright,
(I don't think I shall sleep tonight).
It talks of love like millions of others
by pseudo-poets and their mothers.
Ack...sorry, hair ball.
Best,
Dale
Turn amp all the way up, point pickups toward amp, strum. Viola, feedback.
Best try a music shop. This is a poetry site, and we give critiques as a reward for someone who has given critiques to others, usually a 3 to 1 ratio.
However,
Your rhymes are forced, your lines are trite,
the first four lines gave me a fright,
(I don't think I shall sleep tonight).
It talks of love like millions of others
by pseudo-poets and their mothers.
Ack...sorry, hair ball.
Best,
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.