05-22-2014, 07:23 PM
My neurologist (brain doctor) encouraged me to submit this poem for all who have felt the wrath of migraine pain. I am also posting for those who have never experienced a migraine, lucky..,.
I get headaches daily, sinus migraines weekly and vascular migraines monthly, so I share your pain. I have a migraine poem posted in the NaPM offerings. You have captured the symptoms well. In the first stanza, your ocular anatomy is off. There's no 'meat' in the core of the eye, it is fluid (aqueous humor). I would try to involve the optic nerve to evoke pain. Much of the poem is fragmented and not punctuated, causing many of the lines to oddly run into each other, e.g. the 'twist and yank' between 'ey'e and 'cracked temples', 'take that sharpened fork heated' comes out of no where and sounds odd, 'claw' what 'off', what is 'contained spew'?, etc. I think you need to tighten up the images and your syntax. Good luck with it. By the way, I control mine with Fiorinal. Take care./Chris
I get headaches daily, sinus migraines weekly and vascular migraines monthly, so I share your pain. I have a migraine poem posted in the NaPM offerings. You have captured the symptoms well. In the first stanza, your ocular anatomy is off. There's no 'meat' in the core of the eye, it is fluid (aqueous humor). I would try to involve the optic nerve to evoke pain. Much of the poem is fragmented and not punctuated, causing many of the lines to oddly run into each other, e.g. the 'twist and yank' between 'ey'e and 'cracked temples', 'take that sharpened fork heated' comes out of no where and sounds odd, 'claw' what 'off', what is 'contained spew'?, etc. I think you need to tighten up the images and your syntax. Good luck with it. By the way, I control mine with Fiorinal. Take care./Chris
My new watercolor: 'Nightmare After Christmas'/Chris