05-22-2014, 10:17 AM
hi my first poem
i just wrote it haphazardly. hope it makes sense
i plan to alter the end to feel more hopeful
looking forward to critiques
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facades of happiness
Would that I could
to wash away the sins
of those before, those to come
ones happiness held above anothers misfortune
a helping hand not shown
a helpless sorrow not seen
dare to care, so simple
to share ,neither here nor
there hands up in the air
our numbers grow but
our love doesnt show
forgot the disguise
its about time we realise
no need to filter those
with whom we fraternize
underneath the veneer
were all the same I hear
pain and fear
please dont interfere
were running towards the
resolution this tear
impossible it seems
to witness these scenes
why do we only remember the screams
everynight haunting our dreams
i just wrote it haphazardly. hope it makes sense
i plan to alter the end to feel more hopeful
looking forward to critiques
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facades of happiness
Would that I could
to wash away the sins
of those before, those to come
ones happiness held above anothers misfortune
a helping hand not shown
a helpless sorrow not seen
dare to care, so simple
to share ,neither here nor
there hands up in the air
our numbers grow but
our love doesnt show
forgot the disguise
its about time we realise
no need to filter those
with whom we fraternize
underneath the veneer
were all the same I hear
pain and fear
please dont interfere
were running towards the
resolution this tear
impossible it seems
to witness these scenes
why do we only remember the screams
everynight haunting our dreams