05-22-2014, 10:43 AM
It's a whole lot more readable to me now 
I like it except for the fourth paragraph, which is probably because English is not my first language: what does "mouth waters with contained spew" mean? Mouth wash with spit in it?
I like it except for the fourth paragraph, which is probably because English is not my first language: what does "mouth waters with contained spew" mean? Mouth wash with spit in it?