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Migraine Madness
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05-22-2014, 06:25 AM
As a reader my first critique would be to use some spacing / grouping. I'm sure it has structure in your mind, but to a reader like myself some of it seems superfluous which might have been descriptive and engaging if it were structured better.
I should stress that I'm far from an expert though. |
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Migraine Madness - by Celestina Waters - 05-22-2014, 04:02 AM
RE: Migraine Madness - by Todd - 05-22-2014, 06:09 AM
RE: Migraine Madness - by Celestina Waters - 05-22-2014, 06:12 AM
RE: Migraine Madness - by Jambalaya - 05-22-2014, 06:25 AM
RE: Migraine Madness - by Celestina Waters - 05-22-2014, 09:56 AM
RE: Migraine Madness - by Todd - 05-22-2014, 10:11 AM
RE: Migraine Madness - by Jambalaya - 05-22-2014, 10:43 AM
RE: Migraine Madness - by Celestina Waters - 05-22-2014, 10:50 AM
RE: Migraine Madness - by Jambalaya - 05-22-2014, 11:01 AM
RE: Migraine Madness - by ChristopherSea - 05-22-2014, 07:23 PM
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