Unheard reverse edit 1. bena,keith

[tectak]

Throughout you have good assonance and alliteration, and this includes the first s. but to me, it seems much weaker than the latter ones.

You are the cliché pointer-outer, I suppose I don't need to tell you about that whispering wind...

Great meter though, and I did love certain images: especially hissing grass and the double entendre of "turning" leaves. Nice rhyme scheme as well.

mel in benaville.

Ooops! THANKS BENA AND KEITH!...
How the hell did I leave the wind word on L1!?
It should, of course, be SHE! (I changed it on my file copy when I used HER L5)
I will correct.
Best,
Tom