Mirrory

[ChristopherSea]

Yes, that may work, but I also want that semicolon after coat. You could alternatively drop 'after'. Additionally, I keep reading that 'breastless' as breathless. 'edgelessness' may negate the need to add the pane or window. Perhaps insert a tiny verb? What about:

Mirrory

Drop your coat; ignore
the clouds between
us. The breathless
imprisoned edgelessness is almost
a gift. Accept
this prism.

But do what you think is best! Cheers/Chris