3,320.75 Miles

[Leanne]

Maybe she was a virgin because she was wise

Back to getting rid of abstractions. For example, instead of:

I'll be home soon I promise
Then we can finally snuggle together in our pajamas
Because I miss your warmth and your embrace
And I long to touch you and kiss your face
You might not know it, but you're my saving grace

describe the last snuggle. What was the room like? Was it nighttime, morning or a wee sneaky nooner? What smells were in the air? What sounds were there? Invoking physical senses is powerful in poetry like this. Take us to the moment.