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Depths
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09-19-2013, 04:46 AM
The rhythm is off and the rhyme is stale. Humans divided into wolves and sheep is cliche. There is no explanation of why or depth, just some statements strung together. The juxtaposition of the first and final lines could be worked in to an interesting poem.
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
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Depths - by TheNovice - 09-17-2013, 09:44 AM
RE: Depths - by billy - 09-17-2013, 12:28 PM
RE: Depths - by Malu - 09-18-2013, 02:46 AM
RE: Depths - by TheNovice - 09-18-2013, 07:58 AM
RE: Depths - by GraceVictoria - 09-19-2013, 04:25 AM
RE: Depths - by Aish - 09-19-2013, 04:46 AM
RE: Depths - by gmartino - 09-20-2013, 11:15 AM
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