Kinesics (Edit 1,5)

[ChristopherSea]

Body language is probably the one form of communication that always speaks the truth. Psychologists, human resource personnel and criminal investigators read it all the time, as you do herein with your lover. Your opening two lines are intriguing, as the double-entendre is clever, albeit an unusual way to say igniting or sparking a lighter. I think glossy or blood-shot may convey ‘sad eyes’ better than shiny. Perhaps there is a better modifier, see what you think. You can probably say ‘little white lies’ in a more interesting and novel way like ‘Lilliputian pallid untruths’ ha, ha, just kidding with the example, but you know what I mean. Maybe try ‘spiral’ for ‘twirl and twirl.’ I had some trouble reconciling your close, ‘mirroring bright eyes to illuminate mine.’ Does the dance mirror her bright eyes and then they illuminate yours? One more observation: there seems to be a rather large gap between the last two stanzas, from ‘lies’ to the dance. This could be my problem though. I love the title and the corresponding theme and story told within. Cheers/Chris