This mind that grinds & twists beneath the skin

[GrhmJngL]

...Unless you punctuate to clarity I have the hang MAN in a tight dress. I feel Freud creeping in!...

"Dress" as in a general term for an article of clothing/clothing in general. It's supposed to be for the man.

His breath to make confined and stutter short,
Though freer than the suffocated breast
On which he softly treads and pulls athwart. Sounds good...means nothing. Help

How do you mean?

Be very careful with Freudian confirmations. Thanatos was around( mythically speaking) before Freud. Thanatos was the silent killer, the gentle death, the sleep into the endless night. Freud theorised the shit out of the death wish but never declared a liaison with any contra ( gegengewich) theoretical construct. I must say that I like the firstness of the idea but think it is flawed from the outset. To be discussed.

Wilhelm Stekel was the person who named the death-drive "Thanatos", so I guess that makes it more post-Freudian.

The ambiguity of/parallel between "Thanatos & Eros" as references to Freud and the direct references to classical figures (and thus taken simply as a personification of "love and death").

The punctuation is, errr, innovative.

Is that to say sloppy, or just odd?