Kinesics (Edit 1,5)

[EileenGreay]

I notice how you struggle to turn on any one I like the hint of sexual scorn with 'struggle to turn on'
of your many worn out lighters,
clicking them unconsciously I wonder if the word 'clicking' here could be replaced with something a little more vivid, violent, exciting - 'snapping' maybe. Also with the introduction of music as metaphor below, you could consider replacing 'unconsciously' with 'metronomically': it suggests endless repetition and a guise of order, both of which I think are central aspects of your poem
in 4/4s - I like the introduction of musical metre here, but agree with the former comment that the dash is doing nothing: however, I think the instinct to put the dash in (to accompany the musical ref. with a sense of halting or lurching) is very good - rather than take it out, why not experiment with doing more with it?
or 7/8s
when you're angry,
and only anger can tame you.

I see the vague tremble on your dry lips,
and the twitches
in the corners of your shiny eyes, I feel that 'shiny eyes' is a bit boring - I'm more interested in the corners, why don't you see if placing an adjective there instead of before 'eyes' would make the description more compelling?
when you try to hide your sadness
under cliches Contrary to another comment, I like the line break here: it draws attention to the visual rhyme of 'twitches' and 'cliches' - almost working on paper, failing once voiced. I'd say to keep it - it strengthens the sense of the 'you' attempting to disguise sadness, but the disguise failing to function.
or stiff, smooth talking.

I've learned what they mean:
the small tics around your dimples
when they appear as you smile,
telling me one of your little Not a fan of the line break here - if you did this as a four line stanza the intrusion of a sense of metrical fluency would support the mention of 'little white lies'
white lies.

I watch as you twirl and twirl around, Maybe subsitute the first 'twirl' for 'swirl'?
the motion lifting your skirt
just above your hips -
and you float
lightly across the floor,
mirroring bright eyes
to illuminate mine. I didn't like these last two lines, I'm sorry. Like 'shiny eyes' above, I feel that 'bright eyes' is a bit commonplace and cliché. Overall, I think the final stanza is the weakest - perhaps you could try an alternative which sustains the sense of distance and isolation, rather than the ocular affinity you have now?

I quite like this, and think it has potential! But perhaps try some alternatives - not just word substitutions or different punctuation: explore how the poem turns out if you decide it will end with distance rather than closeness, and really interrogate the space between the two people in this poem. Good luck with working at it, and hope some of these comments are helpful - they are, of course, just my opinion!