Plights Creed

[UnicornRainbowCake]

And so I declare with certainty, I love the start of this, it sets an almost biblical proclamation type tone to the poem
I need to be free from this diseased unease. This needs to be stronger, I must, or I will would work
Lord, I like this as a single line, it really focuses on the spiritual side of things
Uncertainty worships me I liked how you address it to the Lord, but it kind of gets lost from there for me. Personalise it more - is this your uncertainty? Say it is, then
As serenity shuns my spirit. It would also work by saying who's serenity - is this God's?
Vibrating from treetops my voice The syntax feels awkward
Shakes the Robins’ nest. Love, love, love
A test to see which is stronger
Nature,
Or desperation. Love again
I shall win at least that.
If not, my tears shall flood Sahara.
For I shall win at least that. These last three lines are unclear to me. I'm probably not reading it clear enough, but it kind of fades into submissiveness. The poem starts off very strong, and there are some shining moments, but I feel it could be much more than it is if you just switched a few things round