Salt Water

[billy]

not sure if it's a self poem or a poem meant for someone nearby who the narrator is close to, someone who they don't wish to see hurt again.
the extended metaphor works well at the beginning though the duck thing had me stumped. i liked a lot of the images (specially the salty ones)

thanks for the read, it was enjoyable.

Your bones are filled with salt water wondered if 'it' would have been enough seeing as it's already in the title?
Doldrums beat in your hulls is he a catamaran would hull suffice i like the image but i'm not sure that doldrums go well with beats, a suggestion would be lap, or wash, or lick etc. would 'on' work better than 'in'?
Your wood is bleached, twisted in cliffs i love this image, it feels like so final
Time wounds your heals i wonder if this is a little too clever, it does work for me but only just.
Echoes are hollow reminders that no one thinks the way you do normally i'd read this as wordy but in the context of the poem it's bloody excellent; it shows a sensitivity.
Rain drops spring like dancers
Nose burns like a house fire the simile here doesn't work for me. i'm trying to work out why the nose is burning?
Bread crumbs kill ducks and wad up in your throat again here i'm struggling to get a grip on the metaphor. it could be me with the problem and not the metaphor but i'm just mentioning it
So you hold her at arm’s length. as a statement this works well, as advice it doesn't need 'you' i read it as a statement, maybe a comma after so, if that's the case.

If you can see her feet, maybe this one will stay
If you have to count on your toes
How many of her roots have laced through you
Maybe that means that this one will stay
At night she’ll shake like an alarm
Her eyes will flash in your darkness like a lighthouse
Let your roots find her’s [hers] not sure about the 2nd roots.
And let her light unhinge your bones, i have no idea what this means but i love it is 'and' needed? i'm okay with the repetition of bones as it acts like a hook
And you can beat against the sea together
Instead of letting it beat inside you