05-11-2013, 09:37 AM
I like this part
"I should have paid attention
instead of not listening"
This could use some condensing. Though the subject doesn't demand it, the poetry of it does.
But you can say what you think about it. See how you feel about going about the poetry of it. How much drunken logic you think could be spared. If any.
And work from there.
"I should have paid attention
instead of not listening"
This could use some condensing. Though the subject doesn't demand it, the poetry of it does.
But you can say what you think about it. See how you feel about going about the poetry of it. How much drunken logic you think could be spared. If any.
And work from there.