A Lonely Road

[billy]

hi zerric. tomh is saying give the reader something he can see in his mind instead of just telling him it's lonely describe the loneliness of the road.
my road;
lonelier than a snowflake in the desert
try not repeat words unless you're using them in a refrain (of course there are exceptions) the opening line tells us all about the lonely. let the rest of the poem show us why.

don't make unsubstantiated claims.

A lonely road is travelled alone, a lonely road has no one on it a lonely person travels alone
Is what is always said, who said it?

welcome to the site.
it does get easier the more you write

A lonely road in front of me,
A lonely road behind,
These scars of love are my identity,
But still she's on my mind,

A lonely road is travelled alone,
Is what is always said,
This lonely road will be my home,
But still she's in my head,

A lonely sky spreads out above,
The rain: it's way to cry,
I cannot stand what they call love,
Why won't this feeling die?

I know sometimes that love won't fail,
What's happened is in the past,
But to me, love is just a fairy tale,
And forevers never last.