Bedtime books

[Keith]

;It has the appeal of children's tales, and the land of dreams. I think it would be improved if the metres were more regular. It is OK to change from line to line, or even to have an extra half-foot, but breaking out of a more or less established metre is jarring, to me.

This is the point where someone points out that I am criticising something deliberately written to conform to some form....and it is fun.

Thanks Abu all good pointers I will make some changes to try and smooth it out a bit, paying homage really to all those great children's books. TOMH

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what abu said

Thanks billy.....what I said to Abu
enjoyable

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So many children in so many places,
have listen intent with mesmerised faces, listened?
all I say is thanks for the time,
when sleepy heads,
could dream in rhyme.

A lovely poem.

Thanks for pointing that out NakedBear don't know how I missed it. Changed it now. Tomh