Dreams

[Truerenigma]

I like the metaphors. It's not bad actually. I think you could do a little more with the ocean though, I love the ocean, I've live on the ocean most of my life and when i read about it i wasn't to feel the see spray, see the white crest atop the deep blue breakers, the way way a heavy wind curls back the waves. Yeah, writing is tough, but for some of us it's with the agony, maybe add a positive side here, something about the fulfillment of writing.