Hydroponics Are My Future

[milo]

Must beauty's warm embrace
Take always their worthy place,
Those lads nearest the breast?
Destined is love to cost
Thy those dearest,
Felt not in body but spirit.
And thus resent that rose,
Forced to forfeit the sun
For the sake of the garden.[/font]

"beauty's warm embrace" is everything that can go wrong i a modern poem and it is your opening line. It is cliche, abstract and is trying too hard to sound poetic.

In the second line you have a glaring grammar error. In addition, it is wordy and inefficient.
L3 - grammar error.

It never really gets better. TBH, you might want to move this to novice.

I am sorry I can't think of much positive to say about this. Please do not take my comments hard they reflect on the poem, not on you as a person.

milo