03-23-2013, 06:31 AM
(03-23-2013, 06:13 AM)softlyfalling Wrote: My first image was of a little girl playing dress up and marching around in the rain puddles in an act of childish defiance. (and I liked her) But, wow..she grew up fast and hard in the next few lines. Why do I still sense her, inside of the woman she shelters in? I think it may be the near tantrum proportions of the defiance, the unkempt anger and the need to justify herself with literary references. I still like her.I like this a lot. I think that so much of adult anger comes from the child's "it's not faaaaair" impulse. Especially a lot of the anger in this poem. But there's love there too - I like to think the literary references come from love.
(03-23-2013, 06:23 AM)Leanne Wrote: Yes, definitely better. If you wanted a little bit more of a word play, you might try "Complexion" for the title.Being very slow, I'm not sure I understand the pun in "Complexion"... Sorry to be dim!