On Sparkly Eyeliner
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(03-23-2013, 06:13 AM)softlyfalling Wrote:  My first image was of a little girl playing dress up and marching around in the rain puddles in an act of childish defiance. (and I liked her) But, wow..she grew up fast and hard in the next few lines. Why do I still sense her, inside of the woman she shelters in? I think it may be the near tantrum proportions of the defiance, the unkempt anger and the need to justify herself with literary references. I still like her.
I like this a lot. I think that so much of adult anger comes from the child's "it's not faaaaair" impulse. Especially a lot of the anger in this poem. But there's love there too - I like to think the literary references come from love.

(03-23-2013, 06:23 AM)Leanne Wrote:  Yes, definitely better. If you wanted a little bit more of a word play, you might try "Complexion" for the title.
Being very slow, I'm not sure I understand the pun in "Complexion"... Sorry to be dim!
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On Sparkly Eyeliner - by DoReMi - 03-23-2013, 05:01 AM
RE: On Sparkly Eyeliner - by Leanne - 03-23-2013, 05:41 AM
RE: On Sparkly Eyeliner - by DoReMi - 03-23-2013, 06:11 AM
RE: On Sparkly Eyeliner - by softlyfalling - 03-23-2013, 06:13 AM
RE: On Sparkly Eyeliner - by Leanne - 03-23-2013, 06:23 AM
RE: On Sparkly Eyeliner - by DoReMi - 03-23-2013, 06:31 AM
RE: On Sparkly Eyeliner - by tmanzano - 03-23-2013, 12:28 PM



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