On Sparkly Eyeliner
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(03-23-2013, 05:01 AM)DoReMi Wrote:  In sparkly eyeliner and muddy boots,
My mouth can stretch into a grimace, and my cheeks ache
from smiling, sting from crying.
I can scream
Until my scratchy throat rasps love songs,
I can fight and shout,
Or fight and whisper.
I can fuck men and fuck women,
Or lose breath at brush of fingers, holding hands
Breathe someone else's air,
Distracted by plum pallettes on plump lips,
Strong arms, soft stomachs, curves and angles, curls.
I can sing in the shower.
I could've danced (or not) all night.
Lascia chio piange e che sospiri la libertà.
Or else I'm free at last,
And the odds are in my favour,
Or tomorrow is another day.
And I am David, or in David's story.
yes I said yes I will Yes.
I can see clearly while the rain is here, or not
when it's gone.
And find Macavity, but not Alaska.
I contain multitudes
But these are not contradictions.
Ok, I've altered it slightly. I want to keep the Molly Bloom reference, because I think I need the ultimate high brow Ulysses to contrast with the low brow Hunger Games in order to make the point that "high brow" and "low brow" are meaningless constructs. Likewise, I kept one of the Big River lines, though I take your point about the slight excess of the Moon River quote. Does this read better? (Also, as per forum rules, do I need to change it in the first post too?)

(You're right about the title, but I'll need to have a think to come up with something better! I could just call it Complexity?)
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On Sparkly Eyeliner - by DoReMi - 03-23-2013, 05:01 AM
RE: On Sparkly Eyeliner - by Leanne - 03-23-2013, 05:41 AM
RE: On Sparkly Eyeliner - by DoReMi - 03-23-2013, 06:11 AM
RE: On Sparkly Eyeliner - by softlyfalling - 03-23-2013, 06:13 AM
RE: On Sparkly Eyeliner - by Leanne - 03-23-2013, 06:23 AM
RE: On Sparkly Eyeliner - by DoReMi - 03-23-2013, 06:31 AM
RE: On Sparkly Eyeliner - by tmanzano - 03-23-2013, 12:28 PM



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