Whole

[monablackbird]

shoot, sorry -- didn't realise this was mild (again!)

No I love it! And if that's what I can expect in the serious forum, I'll be posting there from now on. Thanks again for the juicy critique!

---

Quick question to all while I'm editing this:

Is it acceptable to rhyme some things and not others? Or are you stuck with rhyme once it's used? Here's the thing...

Chosen like fresh market fruit,
Kicked from the field by careless boots.
Already bruised on one side,
Pumped full of pill popping pesticides.

I love this stanza but it rhymes. Wouldn't it be odd not to continue the rhyme throughout the piece?

Thanks in advance and for all of your help already!
Mona