Poem I

[Leanne]

This has a lovely philosophical feel to it, and you have a good sense of meter. You might consider "panes" instead of "pane" to smooth over that small grammatical bump that's left when you leave out an article.

Although this does work as a complete poem, it would probably serve even better as the introduction to a more specific scenario, something about relationships perhaps.

I look forward to reading more of your work.