In the void with you

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Sometimes I wish I'd never been to SuprBay

Hi Thomas,

I will warn you that while I have been around this site for some time, I still quite often don't understand poetry even when others get it . . . but I don't get it.

I wanted this to be about love and celestial bodies, but if there were two at first and then another, is this a astrological ménage à trois? Or am I doing that redneck thing and getting all mixed up?

In between the --starts amost like a fairytale.
Moon and land,

Between the infinite --I dislike 'infinite', but at this point it is the only nit I have. This is a good opening.
stars and sand

Two travelled one, --is 'travelled' one of those words that can be spelled two different ways? if not it is traveled, but it could be AmE v BrE raising its head up :p
Hand in hand.


Somewhere between the
Land and moon --the reversal is cool here jmo. It reinforced that fairytale/nursery rhyme feeling for me.

You floated too,

In the space between the
Void and you,

One travelled two.

Just noticed both the 'travelled's are double-l so it is probably BrE . . . so disregard that. Ha, I just realized that I assuming you will regard any of this

I really liked the feel of it though I didn't quite get the message. As I mentioned, that is par for me.

Thanks for sharing.