10-18-2012, 03:49 PM
I really like the sounds in your poem. I'm not sure how to comment on abstract poetry though, for me William Carlos Williams got it right when he said – "no ideas but in things". I can't see 'thinly narcissistic' or 'holy illusion'. This is a fault of mine, not of yours. Sorry I can't make a better comment - I hope someone else can!