Gunners Dream
#1
I wish I could write like this...even writing the music to go with it would be nice.

http://youtu.be/g9mhU1mm5P0

The Gunner's Dream (Waters)

Floating down through the clouds
Memories come rushing up to meet me now.
In the space between the heavens
and in the corner of some foreign field
I had a dream.
I had a dream.
Good-bye Max.
Good-bye Ma.
After the service when you're walking slowly to the car
And the silver in her hair shines in the cold November air
You hear the tolling bell
And touch the silk in your lapel
And as the tear drops rise to meet the comfort of the band
You take her frail hand
And hold on to the dream.
A place to stay
"Oi! A real one ..."
Enough to eat
Somewhere old heroes shuffle safely down the street
Where you can speak out loud
About your doubts and fears
And what's more no-one ever disappears
You never hear their standard issue kicking in your door.
You can relax on both sides of the tracks
And maniacs don't blow holes in bandsmen by remote control
And everyone has recourse to the law
And no-one kills the children anymore.
And no one kills the children anymore.

Night after night
Going round and round my brain
His dream is driving me insane.
In the corner of some foreign field
The gunner sleeps tonight.
What's done is done.
We cannot just write off his final scene.
Take heed of his dream.
Take heed.
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#2
This is going to sound super corny but there is no reason why you can't write like that! If you like the lyrics of Pink Floyd, why not try to mirror one of their songs in your own words, condensing/trimming it into a poem? You won't be able to necessarily label that as "your own" work, but it'll give you the framework towards how to do it and stuff. The best way to get better at ANYTHING to me is to practice but also observe professionals/people you idol. If you're trying to get great at basketball, you don't watch local YMCA basketball games and attempt to emulate their moves-- you watch superstars and strive to be like them. You have some great inspiration and taste, use it.
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