This is not bad, may need a couple more revisions, mostly to edit the punctuation, fix some of the abstactions and cliches, but for some reason the meter made it stick in my head.

tommy. let me row back a bit; my last comments had nothing to do with your poem really. My apologies.

serge

(03-31-2013, 08:17 PM)serge gurkski Wrote:  tommy. let me row back a bit; my last comments had nothing to do with your poem really. My apologies.

serge

No need for apology Serge. It's all in good fun.

thank you!