Thank you Pig Pen
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I was suppose to post this earlier, but apparently I was too busy at work that I forgot my password. Anyway, I'm please to inform everyone on April 23, 2010 my poem, "Amidst the Chaos Sprouts the Rose" won 1st place in the Adult category of the Hanover Poet Laureate Poetry Contest.

Here's the link of the announcement:
http://poetlaureatehanover.blogspot.com/...egory.html

Here's the link of the news: http://poetlaureatehanover.blogspot.com/...olumn.html

By now, I'm sure my true identity is disclosed if you have read the contents in the URL. I just want to share this because I haven't won anything before that contest (T.T), and also I want to thank Pig Pen especially to BILLY, ADDY and the rest of the members who have shared their opinions in my works. I wouldn't have achieved without your assistance.

I'll post the recent revision (I'm never satisfied) of the poem now entitled, "The Night You Taught Me Anarchy."

n.d.p. J.delacroix


The Night You Taught Me Anarchy

All I thought of the night
was how we ended up
in this jam-packed bolgia.
Still your heart lingered
at the sound of cymbals
crashing
like beer bottles
shattering
on concrete.

You sat observing
the scene as the guitar’s distorted notes
flew like flies dissipated in the tobacco fog.

The fiends around us,
in black shirts and tattered jeans,
raised their pitchfork fingers
as thunder broke out
from their beer-reeked mouths.

You were barely 16
sipping your can of soda,
exclaiming to me
your view of anarchy.
“Can you see it now?
Amidst the chaos sprouts a rose!”

Yet, all I saw
was you.
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#2
hey,mate,CONGRATSWinkWinkWink
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#3
That's awesome news!!! :metal: Congratulations JD! SmileSmileSmile
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
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#4
(05-07-2010, 02:28 PM)jdelacroix Wrote:  I was suppose to post this earlier, but apparently I was too busy at work that I forgot my password. Anyway, I'm please to inform everyone on April 23, 2010 my poem, "Amidst the Chaos Sprouts the Rose" won 1st place in the Adult category of the Hanover Poet Laureate Poetry Contest.

Here's the link of the announcement:
http://poetlaureatehanover.blogspot.com/...egory.html

Here's the link of the news: http://poetlaureatehanover.blogspot.com/...olumn.html

By now, I'm sure my true identity is disclosed if you have read the contents in the URL. I just want to share this because I haven't won anything before that contest (T.T), and also I want to thank Pig Pen especially to BILLY, ADDY and the rest of the members who have shared their opinions in my works. I wouldn't have achieved without your assistance.

I'll post the recent revision (I'm never satisfied) of the poem now entitled, "The Night You Taught Me Anarchy."

n.d.p. J.delacroix


The Night You Taught Me Anarchy

All I thought of the night
was how we ended up
in this jam-packed bolgia.
Still your heart lingered
at the sound of cymbals
crashing
like beer bottles
shattering
on concrete.

You sat observing
the scene as the guitar’s distorted notes
flew like flies dissipated in the tobacco fog.

The fiends around us,
in black shirts and tattered jeans,
raised their pitchfork fingers
as thunder broke out
from their beer-reeked mouths.

You were barely 16
sipping your can of soda,
exclaiming to me
your view of anarchy.
“Can you see it now?
Amidst the chaos sprouts a rose!”

Yet, all I saw
was you.
what an excellent edit. Confusedtfu: well done JD.

complete and utter proof that the edit works. mmm
i left a message at the site. the poem was worth the trouble Smile
:cla:

i wouldn't have believed you're a lit and language major...but after this edit i'd be surprised were you not Wink Big Grin
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#5
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(05-07-2010, 02:50 PM)srijantje Wrote:  hey,mate,CONGRATSWinkWinkWink


Thanks a Lot srijantje Smile Smile
(05-07-2010, 04:53 PM)addy Wrote:  That's awesome news!!! :metal: Congratulations JD! SmileSmileSmile

Thanks 4 all the help and support, as well as the headbang! Big Grin
(05-07-2010, 07:16 PM)billy Wrote:  
(05-07-2010, 02:28 PM)jdelacroix Wrote:  I was suppose to post this earlier, but apparently I was too busy at work that I forgot my password. Anyway, I'm please to inform everyone on April 23, 2010 my poem, "Amidst the Chaos Sprouts the Rose" won 1st place in the Adult category of the Hanover Poet Laureate Poetry Contest.

Here's the link of the announcement:
http://poetlaureatehanover.blogspot.com/...egory.html

Here's the link of the news: http://poetlaureatehanover.blogspot.com/...olumn.html

By now, I'm sure my true identity is disclosed if you have read the contents in the URL. I just want to share this because I haven't won anything before that contest (T.T), and also I want to thank Pig Pen especially to BILLY, ADDY and the rest of the members who have shared their opinions in my works. I wouldn't have achieved without your assistance.

I'll post the recent revision (I'm never satisfied) of the poem now entitled, "The Night You Taught Me Anarchy."

n.d.p. J.delacroix


The Night You Taught Me Anarchy

All I thought of the night
was how we ended up
in this jam-packed bolgia.
Still your heart lingered
at the sound of cymbals
crashing
like beer bottles
shattering
on concrete.

You sat observing
the scene as the guitar’s distorted notes
flew like flies dissipated in the tobacco fog.

The fiends around us,
in black shirts and tattered jeans,
raised their pitchfork fingers
as thunder broke out
from their beer-reeked mouths.

You were barely 16
sipping your can of soda,
exclaiming to me
your view of anarchy.
“Can you see it now?
Amidst the chaos sprouts a rose!”

Yet, all I saw
was you.

what an excellent edit. Confusedtfu: well done JD.

complete and utter proof that the edit works. mmm
i left a message at the site. the poem was worth the trouble Smile
:cla:

i wouldn't have believed you're a lit and language major...but after this edit i'd be surprised were you not Wink Big Grin

Hahahaha!!! I'm like a toddler. I don't mind playing in the mud as long as I learn something. Anyway, thank you for all the patience and tips Bill. I still have lot's of poems to post. I'll keep posting when I have the time.
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#6
good. and if you have any friends, please send them our way JD Big Grin
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