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Yelleryella123 Offline
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#1
01-27-2013, 06:13 PM
If you believe there is no other way,
there is no other way to find
If you believe humanity is cursed,
it is only in your mind
"What we observe is not nature itself, but nature exposed to our method of questioning" - Werner Karl Heisenber
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01-27-2013, 10:22 PM
(01-27-2013, 06:13 PM)Yelleryella123 Wrote:  
If you believe there is no other way,
there is no other way to find
If you believe humanity is cursed,
it is only in your mind
I think if you're going to do repetition in the first pair than you should consider repetition in the final pair. Maybe,

the curse is in your mind.

I like this.
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson
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