I Dream of You

[starlight]

I have always loved you,
will always love you
Until the stars no longer shine,
until the moon sets forever
You find solace in another,
ignorant of my desire
But at night you appear
I feel the remains of your caress,
the linger of your kiss
And when the suns rises,
I awaken aching for you
I wish for one more night,
one more kiss,
one more caress
Before the inevitable crashes down on us
We are star crossed lovers,
only meeting under a Blue Moon
But I dream of you,
wish for you,
ache for you
I hope one day we will meet again,
under the warmth of the sun's rays,
never to part again
I pray you hope the same
Until then, I shall see you in my dreams
Under the moonlight's cool caress

[billy]

hi starlight, if i were your partner and you'd written this for me i'd love it. but...i'm not and you didn't

on that basis i have to say that the poem is almost an extended cliche, it means that most of the line or phrases are very common in poetry. you could get away with the first two lines but you'd have to give good original reasons why. i'd suggest trying to edit a few lines at a time, 5 or 6. as you progress you'll see what it feels like to see and write something no one else has seen or written.

great to have you on board thanks for the read.

[dark1979]

so beautiful thank you for sharing...

[dark1979]

Thank you for
your reply!!
I found it so beautiful
for many
reasons. The most
important
reason the style.
Style of this writer is
very close from mine and
that touched my
feelings quickly. In my
reading time I
found it beautiful because
my feelings told me
that. There is something
beautiful in the use of
expressions. "Different
expressions "are not exist
in
other poems. The Writer
made me feel like I'm
the one who wrote this
poem.
This all I can say about
your question. My reply
has came
late and I'm sorry for that.