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Love Means
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12-03-2012, 02:31 PM
not conquering all,
but to resurrect what's conquered and redefine what's lost Edit: took out both beens and changed redefining to redefine. 
12-03-2012, 02:37 PM
deep. moving message.
Isn't It Evil to Live Backwards~Loaded Lux I'm Batman, act up and I'll squeeze Hecklers/You'll die before the first clip drops, Heath Ledger!
I like this tight little poem. It's a good insight. One option for you: While they work and this might be too sparse for you, you might cut both instances of been. Oh, and maybe make redefining the same tense as resurrect (redefine).
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson
12-04-2012, 01:39 AM
(12-03-2012, 08:45 PM)Todd Wrote: I like this tight little poem. It's a good insight. One option for you: While they work and this might be too sparse for you, you might cut both instances of been. Oh, and maybe make redefining the same tense as resurrect (redefine).Good call, Thank you Todd Thank you Arriedo |
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