Li Po’s Moonlight

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Li Po’s Moonlight


Pleased with any path on a misted day,
But especially pleased
When it’s a “crystal path,”
A path with transcendence nestled in its peaks.

Glad this time
Its rooted in waves
Of green springy grass
Clad in jeweled dewdrops translucent sleep!

Glad this time
That when looking into fog
And saying to the fog: “Its Buddhist out there,”
I’m gazing into Li Po’s translucent stream.

[arbil_poieo]

Very spiritual and beautifully written. Isn't Li Po a poet?

[benthejack]

I particularly like the tranquility, it is suited to the subject matter.
A beautiful expression of that crystal path through the fog!


I guess the area that I would critique would be

Glad this time
That when looking into fog
And saying to the fog: “Its Buddhist out there,”

It just doesn't seem to flow as nicely as the rest of the poem. (although I couldn't say why, I'm too new for that kind of analysis)