Not out

[cidermaid]

Hi Blogsworth,

Sadly you are quite a long way off the authors intent or meaning in your appreciation of the poem, of course the reading of a poem must by neccesity allow that the interpretation of the poem is then at the comprehension of the reader. So I'm not particularly distressed that about the pirates of the carribean or the long John silver accent - both are quite ammusing actually..I'd be keen to hear a reading done this way.
I'm assuming you did not read the authors note or any of the related comments in some of the discussion boards.
I'll probably not be doing any serious re-writes of this untill after the storm has finally abated.
Thank you for taking the time and trouble to read the poem and I'm glad you had some pleasure from it.

[Bloggsworth]

No - I read it naked as it were. Beautiful writing which I would love to see in a more modern context.

[billy]

Do not read this if an authors' note will spoil the read for you.

I 've decided to write a few lines of explanation as I seam to be getting readers but no feed back here and following a comment on a different thread to the effect that this is a difficult poem to critique. Perhaps a view into the back story might help.
This is a deeply personal and emotional poem written at a time of great financial stress. (James is hubby) and we went from muti-millionaires / owners of a cider factory... to needing food boxes. We lost ten years of investment because the government made a mistake which allowed the banks to have the company from under our feet. 6 lost high courtcases later and the death of my mother-in-law, we were both pretty broken. At time of writing I was angst filled and angry....but my inner voice of faith had something else to say and this poem is the result.
If this helps perhaps now try a re-read.

for bloggsworth
who will never be unpopular for giving honest feedback.

one of the reasons i'm not keen on author's notes or footnotes etc, is that [for me] they tint the poem, they often tint the feedback too. what is good about this thread, is that it shows us how to give feedback, (from one's own (the reader's) perception. it also shows us how to be gracious for time given as to how the poet should reply to feedback.