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#1
whoever it was that created text messaging phones
needs to take all the money they made,
get really drunk, or really high
or a young girlfriend,
anything it takes
to make them old before their time
so they can die.

who thought it would be a good idea
to have a mailbox to carry around with you
everywhere you go?
who even thought it would be nice
to have a portable telephone,
always on call?

don't people leave their homes
to be away from their mailboxes,
away from their phones.
the majority of letters were written by a stamping machine.
the majority of phonecalls are from people that haven't the guts
to show up at your door,
let alone, tell the truth.

and when there's a man and a woman
that are both mad,
or one mad at the other,
everywhere you go,
she has your number,
everywhere she goes,
she can't escape his angry charm.-
you hear a noise or feel a vibration.
is it the publisher's clearing house poetry event,
or the latest friend to have gotten paid
dinner money for a night out of the week?
no.-it's the girl being mad.
it's somebody that's accusing you of something
you didn't do
(but might as well have done) ,
because she's already punished you for it
an eye for an eye...

or it's the man with the weight of the world
on his sleeve,
and you're too busy coming up with lies
when he lights up, unprepared,
your phone, twenty-thirty some times
a day.
between all the other calls
and text messages
you pay your hard earned dollars,
and sell your soul
to the corporate pimp with interest,
to explain how you 'can't come to the phone
right now, ' when phones are made that come
to you, and never die.

men that never die.
women that never die.
phones and makers of phones
that never die.
and everyone of them has something to say.

and if you can't come to the phone right now,
there's a world full of people that can.
and you can say the same thing
to them all.
it doesn't matter.

as long as we're doing something!
-doing something,
to keep the service going.
and to get our money's worth the service.
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#2
the rant is obvious though it does feel a little to prose.
some of the poetic devices define it as a poem but it
feels too clinical. it also feels a little to much tell. while
the poem is okay, i'd have liked to see some of the
instances of spam etc, specially with a bit of humour.
"i don't want you're double glazing
and
"you can slide your credit card up arse"
a few images would go a long way.

thanks for the read.
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#3
It's not a very important subject for me, other than what an obvious rant can do. Portable phones wrecked some pretty special situations for me though.... There aren't many people posting poems lately.
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#4
yeah, we go through slow phases now and again. it's cyclic Hysterical
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#5
once went on a date an we wos getting chatty about things an deep in convo when his moby went off...without even askin like to be polite he shushed me an answerd the call

he gimme a propa class look when i took it off him an plopped it in his pint an stormed out Big Grin i havent owned a moby for nearly 3 years now an its been 18 months 2 weeks an 4 days since me last text...loving the freedom

really enjoyed the rant an a cool subject but yeah i think the ending should be a little closer to the beggining
Smile
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#6
It should drone on forever like those people on their phones.

I would take a girl out to dinner. She'd lived with some rich guy, and did modeling for photographs. So she thought of herself as a celebrity, and had people calling her from all over the country. Never fifteen minutes passed without calls and messages. She'd sit at the table and carry on conversations with several people in different places all at once. You couldn't sleep at night, because she wouldn't let you cut her phone off, and she slept with it in her hand. It was maddening. I still haven't got over it.

But many people need the phone every moment. And you can't listen to the radio, people will turn it down and make phonecalls. As if phonecalls deserve special treatment. It may have been that way once, but now that people get phonecalls every few minutes, they might as well not even show up, and instead just stay home and talk on the phone.
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#7
ARRRGGHH people that come up to the bar an in the middle of asking for ther order answer the phone...then get upset when i walk off an serve somone else...it gives me great sadistic pleasure to put em at the back of the queue

they soon learn Smile
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