I Still Miss You

[JayB]

Hey
It’s Me
I just wanna say that
I hope you find peace
I hope you don’t cry
when you think about me
I  remember that time
When we fell asleep
My hand in yours
Your hand in mine
Together forever
We stayed intertwined
I loved you too much
Couldn’t see the signs
And now that you’re gone
I wish I’d rewind
Right all my wrongs
I’d cut up that rope
From where you had hung
I just cannot cope
You were the one
Who filled me with hope
But now I know
My love wasn’t enough
I wrote you a song
I passed by your grave
It's been so long
Since I’ve seen your face
I wish I could take you
To all of these places
I wish you could see
What you were to me
Baby I miss you
You were so kind
Maybe I’ll see you
When it is my time
What I’ve been thinking is killing my mind
We’ll never see the sunrise
Again
Together
I look up at the starlight
And see
Your face
I been staying up at twilight
Again
Baby
I ain’t been feeling alright
I’m not alright
I got a question
Will you wait for me
On the Other side
I wanna hold you
Just one more time
So maybe in another life

[flotsson]

Hey
It’s Me
I just wanna say that
I hope you find peace
I hope you don’t cry
when you think about me
I  remember that time
When we fell asleep
My hand in yours
Your hand in mine
Together forever
We stayed intertwined
I loved you too much
Couldn’t see the signs
And now that you’re gone
I wish I’d rewind
Right all my wrongs
I’d cut up that rope
From where you had hung
I just cannot cope
You were the one
Who filled me with hope
But now I know
My love wasn’t enough
I wrote you a song
I passed by your grave
It's been so long
Since I’ve seen your face
I wish I could take you
To all of these places
I wish you could see
What you were to me
Baby I miss you
You were so kind
Maybe I’ll see you
When it is my time
What I’ve been thinking is killing my mind
We’ll never see the sunrise
Again
Together
I look up at the starlight
And see
Your face
I been staying up at twilight
Again
Baby
I ain’t been feeling alright
I’m not alright
I got a question
Will you wait for me
On the Other side
I wanna hold you
Just one more time
So maybe in another life

There's a lot here, and I like a lot of it. The scrolling verse feels really expansive and rambling, almost stream of consciousness, which fits content well. Lack of punctuation helps too. Meanwhile the loose rhythm has just enough there to pull me along without feeling overbearing, stumbling in a few places exactly how you'd expect these emotions to disrupt your train of thought. Resonant stuff.

[JayB]

Thank You. I didn't really revise it, I just had these in my head and felt I needed to get them out.

[carahmellow]

Hey
It’s Me
I just wanna say that
I hope you find peace
I hope you don’t cry
when you think about me
I  remember that time
When we fell asleep
My hand in yours
Your hand in mine
Together forever
We stayed intertwined
I loved you too much
Couldn’t see the signs
And now that you’re gone
I wish I’d rewind
Right all my wrongs
I’d cut up that rope
From where you had hung
I just cannot cope
You were the one
Who filled me with hope
But now I know
My love wasn’t enough
I wrote you a song
I passed by your grave
It's been so long
Since I’ve seen your face
I wish I could take you
To all of these places
I wish you could see
What you were to me
Baby I miss you
You were so kind
Maybe I’ll see you
When it is my time
What I’ve been thinking is killing my mind
We’ll never see the sunrise
Again
Together
I look up at the starlight
And see
Your face
I been staying up at twilight
Again
Baby
I ain’t been feeling alright
I’m not alright
I got a question
Will you wait for me
On the Other side
I wanna hold you
Just one more time
So maybe in another life

Sometimes poems like this feel very theraputic... to not only write, but read too. Simple, to the point.. I also like the short lines and how I had to scroll to read. It added to the experience. I think it could be edited down slightly, maybe revised, just to play with some wording a bit. I think you could make this even better by making it a bit more flowery. Great work! Sorry for your loss. <3