Accident

[Semicircle]

Latent contents
lopsided,
            distribute. Forms
shapes branding pain–.


Recognizes them.
Navigation.
Watched.


Firm contraction
            knotted,
bowing–
                      expulsive
                             void.

Alive, still
forgotten.

[CRNDLSM]

The third section I can do without, some of your word choices In the first two 'latent, bodies, probed' give a twisted pleasure connotation, and all the 'help's are overkill, I can't feel it. It was an accident? Are you trying to fix it?

[rowens]

Latent contents 
lopsided,
             distribute. Forms
Shapes branding pain–.


Recognizes them.
navigation.
Watched.

(I'm going to a new Writers' Group, tonight. They are going to want me to explain things from the beginning. What beginning?)
See?

The last part of this poem breaks down. 
That can happen in poetry.

This is a part of emotional structure.

Emotional/Cerebral.

Was you breaking down in the next section here? 

Primal yell!!!!!!!?


Uncontrollable pleasure……………………………………………
Help!
Help!!
Help!!!
Help!!!!
Help!!!!!
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Shapes branding pain.

That's good.

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Shit, I branded that.


I'm tired, son.

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Shapes branding brain.

Forms braiding pain.

You feel me?

Cultures wagging Cult

[Semicircle]

Latent contents 
lopsided,
             distribute. Forms
Shapes branding pain–.


Recognizes them.
navigation.
Watched.

(I'm going to a new Writers' Group, tonight. They are going to want me to explain things from the beginning. What beginning?)
See?

The last part of this poem breaks down. 
That can happen in poetry.

This is a part of emotional structure.

Emotional/Cerebral.

Was you breaking down in the next section here? 

Primal yell!!!!!!!?


Uncontrollable pleasure……………………………………………
Help!
Help!!
Help!!!
Help!!!!
Help!!!!!

---

Shapes branding pain.

That's good.

---

Shit, I branded that.


I'm tired, son.

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Shapes branding brain.

Forms braiding pain.

You feel me?

Cultures wagging Cult
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Got a bit carried away, yes. Thank you for polishing my turd. Wasted potential irks me.

Tell the book club any beginning, if you have any.

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The third section I can do without, some of your word choices In the first two 'latent, bodies, probed' give a twisted pleasure connotation, and all the 'help's are overkill, I can't feel it.  It was an accident? Are you trying to fix it?

The idea was an AI gained partial sentience and died trying to contact its creators, being unable to cope with sensation. I wonder if it has happened before, by accident.