"Under the round moon. Professionalism. Oblong thoughts." (Languadge.)

[Ris Yerg]

When I was a bouncer
In a brothel
I often heard
A madam taught her girls:
Keep dignity,
Under a client,
Don't fuss!
Alas.
Not many a professional
Remember now her words ...

[billy]

for me this is the best one of yours
i've read Ris.

keep dignity
under a client
don't fuss.
were three superb lines and ones that got a wry smile out of me.

thanks for the read.

[Ris Yerg]

Thank you, Billy!
R.Y.

[Todd]

Hi,

I like this. I like the short line structure of it, and I think the madam's advice was really good. If I were to make any revision suggestions they would simply be these:

When I was a bouncer
In a brothel
I often heard --you could pull up "a madam" to have a parallel structure with "a bouncer earlier
A madam taught her girls:--I think you may want teach here instead of taught
Keep dignity,
Under a client,
Don't fuss!--these lines are excellent.
Alas.
Not many a professional
Remember now her words ...

Thanks for the read.

Best,

Todd