The Structure of the Architect

[DragonBlue]

The Structure of the Architect
I thought I gave her the foundation of strength
to grow and learn, taking the entire length
of what it takes to be a humane human on this plane
but in return receive the manifestation of pain.
 
Her frame constructed of elemental values
based on principles of natural law avenues
Do not steal, do not litter, nor should you lie
was what I taught her by example and why.
 
Today I find she lied to me again
and doesn't care about the hurt she sends
to me as my heart breaks in two
because baby “I do love you!”
 
Her trusses and roof I placed with care
of my love, my soul and all that's fair
fitting each piece quite snug, very sound
only to find she won't come around.
 
To finish her off I gave her style and grace
proud to make an addition to the human race,
teaching her that beauty was more than skin deep
yet somehow the poison of life began to seep..
 
into her soul as she drifted farther away
from the structure of the architect as today
she severed another supporting beam
that held me together without a seam.

[CRNDLSM]

There are things I like and things I don't like about this piece, thanks for sharing

[Mark A Becker]

Hey Maylynn-

This piece reminded me of one by Alan Dugan.  Notice the details he weaves into his poem, which is one that I've admired for a very long time.  Link below:

https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poems/5...236709aeab

[brynmawr1]

Hey Maylynn-

This piece reminded me of one by Alan Dugan.  Notice the details he weaves into his poem, which is one that I've admired for a very long time.  Link below:

https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poems/5...236709aeab

I really liked the poem you referenced above.  Glad I found it.  Easy to learn from reading stuff like that.

steve