Only love (Edit 1.0, Tiger)

[busker]

Only love (Edit 1.0)

There is love,
and those against it,
through the ages. Love,
and the memory 
of autumnal branches
gnawing at the moon.
Love, and the cry
of Achilles, through the ages.

Original version

There is only love
and those against it,
through the ages. Only love,
and an autumnal memory 
like trees in microburbs 
soaring towards the moon;
only love, and the cry
of Achilles, through the ages.

[Tiger the Lion]

Only love

There is only love
and those against it,
through the ages. Only love,
and an autumnal memory 
like trees in microburbs 
soaring towards the moon;
only love, and the cry
of Achilles, through the ages.

I feel like the poem would read stronger if you struck "only" everywhere but in the title. There's a cliche feel to repeating "only love" that somehow gets a pass when it's in the title. Plus the title implies the "only" to the rest of the piece.

[busker]

That.....is very good feedback. Removing 'only', and leaving but 'love'....yeah, point taken.

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I retained it in the first line, which sounds off to my ear otherwise