A Ghastly London Night

[FrenchToast]

It was once upon a sleepless night
when faint I stumbled from my bed
and found my way to my porcelain throne
where I sat like a king, regal and said
"It is here, I shall take out my phone."

So the phone did come 
and it's shimmer did glare
and my eyes adjusted to the sun's wicked stare
as I scrolled through social media.

Addiction became me
so an hour I sat
with my bum on the loo
in a very great spat
and my legs became numb
and it was then that I decided
I'd had a good run
and I stood, quite indicted
but standing would be my undoing.

My phone slipped from my grasp
into great muddy waters
and here I beg the question
should I buy a new phone
or should I just leave social media alone?

[Knot]

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Hi FT,
it's a promising start but then it begins to fall apart.
In S1 it's a 'sleepless night' but in S2 you've 'the sun's wicked stare';
in S3 your narrator is addicted in an hour.  Quite the feat.
And, what does the ending have to do with the archaic language?  Just riffing off 'king'?

Also (and by no means all),
feint = faint
thrown = throne
regal/king (pick one)
shimmer/glare (pick one)
spat - not sure what you mean here.  I think you're going for the sound (meaning) but don't think it quite works.

Just a thought (or two)

Once upon a sleepless night
when faint I stumbled from my bed
and instinct took me to my throne
where like a king I sat and said
"here, shall I take out my phone

for even though the hour's late
and my guts do gripe and groan
still must I know of the fate
of  ... ?

I'd still like to know why the king is faint (presumably this takes leads to the throne?)
But why take the phone.  What are they looking for? Doesn't that suggest they're already addicted.


Best, Knot


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[busker]

'Twas once upon a sleepless night
when faint I stumbled from my bed
and found my way to my porcelain throne
where I sat like a king, regal and said
"Tis here, I shall take out my phone."

So the phone didst come .... the 'st' suffix, archaically speaking, applies only to the second person singular. Its usage here is incorrect
and it's shimmer did glare .... its, not it's
and my eyes adjusted to the sun's wicked stare
as I scrolled through social media.

Addiction became me
so 'n hour I sat .... what's 'n? 'An' doesn't need to be abbreviated and I don't recall such an abbreviation, archaically speaking
with my bum on the loo 
in a very great spat
and my legs became numb
and 'twas there I decided
I'd had a good run
and I stood, quite indicted .... don't understand the use of 'indicted' here
but standing would be my undoing.

My phone slipped from my grasp
into great muddy waters
and here I beg the question
should I buy a new phone
or should I just leave social media alone? 

Good first poem - despite the subject

[Tiger the Lion]

Probably better to lay off the archaic language without first having at least a loose grasp of it. It's a pretense anyway and its contrast with the modern theme of the poem isn't really justified. The first few lines suggest an ear for meter but it soon dissolves. I would try it without the old english and more tightly focused on meter. 
Good Luck with it

[FrenchToast]

Probably better to lay off the archaic language without first having at least a loose grasp of it. It's a pretense anyway and its contrast with the modern theme of the poem isn't really justified. The first few lines suggest an ear for meter but it soon dissolves. I would try it without the old english and more tightly focused on meter. 
Good Luck with it

I quite agree with your judgment on this and I have made the necessary edits.