alleys and leaves

[heslopian]

in a house on a street
with alleys and leaves
a tray of cookies cool
at the dining table

and the cat licks my toes
as i watch the TV
and i wave to my neighbour
as she trims her hedge

the sun is static
like a paused video
and then i hear it
on the drive

the wheels of your car
and you opening the door

[Ris Yerg]

Fantastic!
Just fantastic work!
5 stars and rep. point. Even if ... Ha-ha!
R.Y.

[billy]

i find this deliciously simple and deliciously complimentary to the avatar you have.

it's so thought provoking. yet so laid back. is she happy or is she sad, i think she could be either, or it could even be a he.
personally i think it's a she and said she is extremely happy and in love. great read jack. i like that you didn't use grammar in it.
love the image you set up in my mind as well.
thanks for posting it

[heslopian]

Thank you Billy! I didn't really think that you'd like this so much. It was sort of inspired by ee cummings (hence all the lower case letters). The narrator is indeed a woman, and yet also me (I'm not a transvestite; it's hard to explain). Thanks again for your lovely comments. Nice to know Joyce Grenfell fits in with my poem as well

And thank you Ris for your kind words