Part of a longer poem I'm working on

[Lawrence]

I cannot trust my bedroom floor
At night, to keep its lifeless form,
Its lurching croaks, its fossil planks,
Or order in its rigid ranks;
Instead, I pray to fall asleep
Before the boards reform beneath
As ocean-water, cold and grey
Which carries all the walls away

[Ris Yerg]

Wonderful imagination!
Impressed!
R.Y.

[billy]

the flow is excellent. and so for me is the content. i also like the rhyme scheme. the poetic devices used were used well. if this is a short excerpt, i can't wait for the full thing.
great stuff Lawrence.

thanks for the read.