Jim, whatever are you doing back there?

[waitingforgodet]

Demure, even out right shy
(acting) makes me wonder why.
So unnecessary, really, yet comical too.
And charming when she pretends it's all so new.

I don't do this on a first date.
Of course, not, me neither: ( I take the bait):

You're such a beautiful lady.
Thank you, don't stop what you're doing, baby.
Not until I get lock jaw.
Oh, that’s so good . . . Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwww!

Sweetheart, will you turn over and raise your sweet ass?
She giggles and does what I ask.

I take a moment of silence to show reverence for her.
And blessed am I who has paradise so near.

Jim, whatever are you doing back there?

[billy]

Demure, even out right shy
(acting) makes me wonder why.
So unnecessary, really, yet comical too.
And charming when she pretends it's all so new. the meter jars a little in the last 2 lines.

I don't do this on a first date.
Of course, not, me neither: ( I take the bait):

You're such a beautiful lady.
Thank you, don't stop what you're doing, baby.
Not until I get lock jaw.
Oh, that’s so good . . . Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwww!

Sweetheart, will you turn over and raise your sweet ass?
She giggles and does what I ask.

I take a moment of silence to show reverence for her.
And blessed am I who has paradise so near.

Jim, whatever are you doing back there?

i feels toungue in cheek if you'll excuse the pun lmao.
for me the last line isn't needed. and the meter feels jerky in a few places.
the the rhyme is good apart from awwwwwwwwwwwww which feels a little forced. it made me smile so i know i enjoyed it.
thanks for the read jim.

[waitingforgodet]

Good point, Billy, on the awwwwwwwwww--it could be replaced with something else, and yes, the poem is a tongue in cheek observation. The last line, though, is needed because she is waiting for the action to begin yet nothing is happening while he's in the state of reverence.

I do thank you.