One on the fly

[Caravano]

Creosote evaporates on a Poussin equation of how light also evaporates in a rhythm.
The world seemed so malleable, a child playing with the red clay and water,
my hands red and wet and I knew not to wipe them on mom's towels.
All the moments have been murdered, watching wings flap, oscillation on dirty strips,
in their chaos of crossed "bones". The real man has an exoskeleton,
his death is a crushing to green and white ooze, but I want
to be pink, neglected, except for a desire that lives outside its thought.
But maybe, I want to live again, and again, churned into a meal 
of clear plastic wings and sectioned eyes and simply moments of agony and moments without
so I understand the difference.

[CRNDLSM]

Creosote evaporates on a Poussin equation of how light also evaporates in a rhythm. 'Also' means I should have an understanding that creosote and light both evaporate in a rhythm, or that poussins equation of light evaporation was a result of his own observations of Creosote
The world seemed so malleable, a child playing with the red clay and water, here commas seem to make a list
my hands red and wet and I knew not to wipe them on mom's towels. I appreciate the sonics but I can't form a sentence
All the moments have been murdered, watching wings flap, oscillation on dirty strips, I feel like I've taken some mental leaps 
in their chaos of crossed "bones". The real man has an exoskeleton, bones in apostrophes takes away from the image, forces the metaphor
his death is a crushing to green and white ooze, but I want
to be pink, neglected, except for a desire that lives outside its thought. You could definitely concentrate these images into fewer words
But maybe, I want to live again, and again, churned into a meal 
of clear plastic wings and sectioned eyes and simply moments of agony and moments without clear plastic wings and sectioned eyes like a metamorphosis into insect but without what? This isn't the end of the sentence but it feels like ending on a preposition
so I understand the difference.

I don't know if I like thinking this about a fly and feeling like it was written on the fly or if the cleverest part is the title but I'd read an edit or two for sure

[Erthona]

"Creosote evaporates on a Poussin equation of how light also evaporates in a rhythm."

How does "Creosote evaporate" "on" a Poussin equation. Should it not be "in". The "also" seems to serve no purpose and does " light evaporate in a rhythm."? "evaporate" speaks to liquids not photons, this seems very confused.

The rest of the poem appears to make more sense, if grotesque, although it seems an awful long way to go to make a pun.

"his death is a crushing to green and white ooze" seems more a beetle than a fly. Seems like an awkward phrase.

"moments of agony and moments without
so I understand the difference."

Knowing the difference seems axiomatic. I don't understand the need?

best,

dale