Beams Burst Bright Golden Yellow At Sunset

[Torkelburger]

Beams burst bright golden yellow at sunset
Like painted flames on a canvas of sky
Light glows forth from Odin’s descending eye
Beams burst bright golden yellow at sunset!
 
Like painted flames on a canvas of sky
Clouds form cathedrals of purple and blue
From their shadows the sun’s rays pierces through
Like painted flames on a canvas of sky
 
Clouds form cathedrals of purple and blue
Off in the distance, a sound of thunder
A flock of geese increases in number
Clouds form cathedrals of purple and blue
 
Off in the distance, a sound of thunder
Sparkling stars flicker dimly like lanterns
Crescent moon anxiously awaits its turn
Off in the distance, a sound of thunder
 
Beams burst bright golden yellow at sunset
Like painted flames on a canvas of sky
Light glows forth from Odin’s descending eye
Beams burst bright golden yellow at sunset!

[Torkelburger]

Yeah, I was going for the metaphor that the sky is an artist's canvas (as though mother nature or god is the artist) and the sunbeams were painted flames. I see now how it's not so clear

[busker]

I'm having trouble reconciling a stormy sky with stars and a moon, a flock of geese, and golden yellow sunbeams. But other than that, nicely done. I like the reference to Odin's descending eye.