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A disarray of paperbacks.
Bunk beds piled with debris.
Carpet scattered like the steps
Down which new brides descend.
I reside in this narrow landscape.
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(01-10-2011, 06:26 PM)Heslopian Wrote: A disarray of paperbacks.
Bunk beds piled with debris.
Carpet scattered like the steps
Down which new brides descend.
I reside in this narrow landscape.
have you been studying .
it seems you need to clean the room.
a good example of the form. nicely done jack.
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In order to beat my writer's block, I decided to try a couple of forms from your "short poetry guidelines." Hence this and the cinquain. It worked wonderfully
Thank you for the kind words, Billy.
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good man
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Nice. Exactly - my son's room description!
R.Y.
